Could use some help.

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Originally Posted by CoreyD

I am by far an English major or great typer, my words and knowledge is through my mouth.
http://coreydittel.com/

The one thing I see, in your posts here and on your website is the "unusual" syntax of sentences. Is English your native language?

If not, maybe the best thing is to convey your thoughts to someone to put into a more traditional english language format.

And yea, get rid of the 3rd person format.